Re: An Story That takes Place In Your Head
Posted: Sun Jan 18, 2015 12:32 pm
Is this a story, or a script? Script writing is a big no no. Also, listing someone as Person 1, 2 etc isn't really that interesting!
The plot also doesn't really make much sense and there's a lot of incorrect tenses in sentences.
For example:
Your punctuation is good at least, so good job with that. Improve on these things and your writing will be much better.
The plot also doesn't really make much sense and there's a lot of incorrect tenses in sentences.
For example:
I believe you're looking for 'hasn't it?'Your world has forgotten what true beauty is, isn't it?
Your punctuation is good at least, so good job with that. Improve on these things and your writing will be much better.