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My Story : Slender
Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2014 1:31 pm
by KateBulka
My story : Slender
early in the morning 4 TEENS went to school, one of their friend drew something strange when they returned they shared talking
1 girl say
Our friend can not be crazy, I not know what happens, but we can handle!
2 girl say
Learn it for tomorrow!
2 day:
they had a day off, and they went into the forest, they wanted to be filmed, and not even remembered about each other when they came home they saw the pictures (their) their elder friend saw a strange tall man without a face, she asked them.
4 girl say
You have not seen anything like it on the frames?
All but 4 said
not?
Then they went back to the forest and saw a friend with a long man.
A friend told Slender
My lord, that you order?
Slender say
Kill your friends
They were worried friend noticed them and wrapped in rope
One of them killed as a Slender and saved all
THE END
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2014 1:34 pm
by RudeGuy
First of all, this is too short. I recommend to write more.
Second, I can't understand anything. Write in a better english please.
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2014 1:38 pm
by Sevennights
Well that was interesting but it was not the best storys yet to date. You tried to make a story off of the lore of the game slender but it was too short and quite confusing.
Rating: 6.7
Work on a majority amount of the story.
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2014 2:32 pm
by glitch4
Christian07 wrote:Write in a better english please.
....uhhh you know that he's 10 , and....Still, his english is terrible, it may be taken a few years to get his english a bit better... Just leave him with a crappy grammar alone... He will pay attention with these.
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2014 3:14 pm
by lighthouse64
GLDude wrote:Christian07 wrote:Write in a better english please.
....uhhh you know that he's 10 , and....Still, his english is terrible, it may be taken a few years to get his english a bit better... Just leave him with a crappy grammar alone... He will pay attention with these.
oh... Um you know 10 year olds don't always have bad grammar.
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Sun Aug 24, 2014 3:24 pm
by HenryRichard
lighthouse64 wrote:GLDude wrote:Christian07 wrote:Write in a better english please.
....uhhh you know that he's 10 , and....Still, his english is terrible, it may be taken a few years to get his english a bit better... Just leave him with a crappy grammar alone... He will pay attention with these.
oh... Um you know 10 year olds don't always have bad grammar.
He lives in egypt, that's why it's not so great.
On topic, the story is rather meh, try making it longer.
Re: My Story : Slender
Posted: Sun Aug 24, 2014 3:58 pm
by Shadow Yoshi
In another topic, Joey wrote:Please take this board seriously if you plan on posting in it.