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Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2018 10:37 pm
by TheNightingale

Welcome to:
Surtur's Mario Stories
This is like a little online book where you'll find stories based on the Mario games, all composed by me!

Introduction:
I don't have much to say here. Just to mention that I like the Mario-themed stories, and I think I know enough about this franchise to compose my very own ones. That's all.

1. Mario's Shameful Race
Spoiler: show
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The colors in some text means the following:
Peach dialogue
Daisy dialogue
Mario dialogue
Tom Koopa dialogue
It was a hot summer day in the Mushroom Kingdom. Princess Peach was about to serve some tea for herself and Daisy, but she says:

- Do you not think it's too hot to drink tea? I prefer to eat something cold, like ice cream!
- Hmm ... I think you're right. But where will we get some?
- I know exactly where. I'll be right back!

Daisy then goes to the house of the ice cream seller. Meanwhile, two Toads see her from afar and started to write a letter for her, which they would later turn into a paper airplane. When Daisy goes back to the castle, one of the Toads throws the paper airplane, and it falls right in front of her. Daisy opened the letter, and this was what it said:

Courtesy of the Mushroom Kingdom
For: Princess Daisy

We know that you like a lot
sports, so we invite you to participate
Friday night at an track and field event.

iLocation: Mushroom Stadium

We wait for you!

Daisy then said to herself:

- Of course I will participate! I can not lose this opportunity!

Well, Friday night came, and Daisy was already in the Mushroom Stadium. There was many people outside waiting for the start of the event. Also was the only Koopa Troopa with a red shell that was not part of Bowser's troops, since he used to have a smiling face. Daisy approached him and said:

- Hello! What is your name? What are you doing here?
- My name is Tom. I am the only red Koopa Troopa who has no bad intentions, and I come to see this exciting event. I also want to meet the plumber Mario! Do you know him?
- Of course I know him! He will participate in the race! But I think he has not arrived here yet...
- It's okay!
...

While everything was getting ready, Daisy and Tom established a long conversation. Suddenly, Daisy sees Mario arrive and tells Tom:

- Look, there's Mario! Let's greet him!

Then Daisy and Tom go to Mario. Tom introduces himself:

- Hi Mario, it's a great pleasure to meet you. My name is Tom, and I am the only red Koopa Troopa that is not part of Bowser's troops.
- Hello, it's weird to see a Koopa Troopa with good intentions, but it's always nice.

Then Tom says something that could have motivated Mario and Daisy a lot:

- I will give you some advice. In each obstacle, do not worry about doing high jumps. Just do long jumps, so you'll save time. Especially in the last one.

Mario and Daisy agreed. And the race was about to start. But after a time having started, everything seemed to be dominated by Mario and Daisy: Mario managed to make the long jumps, and Daisy was not capable but she saved time with her great speed. But, unfortunately, Mario stumbled on the final obstacle, and Daisy asked him scared what had happened. Mario replied very annoyed:

- Tom definitely has bad intentions. He said that we should make the long jump especially in the final obstacle, but this one was higher, logically I was going to stumble.

However, all the other participants were far behind, and they couldn't reach Mario and Daisy when they stopped, so Daisy, although she was very excited to win, let Mario cross the finish line first, to make him feel better. Mario thanked her very much, because Daisy thought of Mario first than herself.

THE END

For now there's just one but I will add more soon :D

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2018 5:23 am
by Eri7
Cool story, i didn't expect the plot twist with Tom. I am also suprised how well you manage to write the story, my only problem is that there are some mistakes with the grammatic and in some places, you could have used better words but for a first try, it was good.

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2018 6:29 am
by TheNightingale
Eri7 wrote:
Sat Dec 15, 2018 5:23 am
Cool story, i didn't expect the plot twist with Tom. I am also suprised how well you manage to write the story, my only problem is that there are some mistakes with the grammatic and in some places, you could have used better words but for a first try, it was good.
Thanks!

Well I usually don't have spell errors in english but, in this case I used the translator because I'm not good enough at english language to compose a whole story. And you know, sometimes that translator becomes a mess... And I was about to fix some spell errors yesterday but I didn't have the time, so I will do it now.

EDIT: Done

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2018 12:25 pm
by ThePieSkyHigh
Not bad... But what if you made it longer?

Or at least for the future stories. And not to be rude but uhm.. I didn't see Tom as a plot twist... Plot twists are usually bigger, I just saw this as a mistake. Tom has nothing to do with Mario not being able to jump high like Luigi XD

But okay! Another way to pass the time, for you and all who read

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2018 12:30 pm
by TheNightingale
ThePieSkyHigh wrote:
Sat Dec 15, 2018 12:25 pm
Not bad... But what if you made it longer?

Or at least for the future stories. And not to be rude but uhm.. I didn't see Tom as a plot twist... Plot twists are usually bigger, I just saw this as a mistake. Tom has nothing to do with Mario not being able to jump high like Luigi XD

But okay! Another way to pass the time, for you and all who read
Thanks

And Tom, despite doesn't appear in Mario games, does have something to do... Is not him a Koopa Troopa? XD

I don't know about plot twists, and I didn't have the intention of make one so don't judge about that XD

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2018 12:37 pm
by ThePieSkyHigh
Alright then

I suck at reviews anyways :p

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Thu Mar 14, 2019 7:59 pm
by MegaDood
This is an alright story for its length.
Anyone remember Waluigi's Taco Stand? The greatest masterpiece of our modern day literature.
Nah but really, nice job with this.

Re: Surtur's Mario Stories

Posted: Thu Mar 14, 2019 9:34 pm
by TheNightingale
MegaDood wrote:
Thu Mar 14, 2019 7:59 pm
This is an alright story for its length.
Anyone remember Waluigi's Taco Stand? The greatest masterpiece of our modern day literature.
Nah but really, nice job with this.
Thanks!

I guess I'm not a noob at this after all...