Hail to the Lemons / Vive les Citrons

[OffensiveLemon]

A song I made using LMMS, that I will use in my upcoming project, "Mario's Extradimensional Adventure." Why it's called "Hail to the Lemons," I have no idea. I just came up with some random, dumb name.

Une chanson que j'ai fait en utilisant de LMMS, que je utiliserai dans mon prochain projet, «L'Aventure Extra-Dimensionelle de Mario.» Pourquoi est-ce qu'il s'appèlle «Vive les Citrons,» je n'en ai aucune idée. J'ai trouvé juste quel nom arbitraire et stupide.

[krakin]

This sounds really creepy, I hear a little dose of earrape too. It's a pretty simple song, not that much happening in it.

[FireyPaperMario]

I got so scared, I wet my pants!

[PixelPest]

I got so scared, I wet my pants!

Really. What is wrong with you. That was so unnecessary.

Anyway, pretty interesting song. Has a lot of potential and is really fun to listen to. Just a few suggestions:

• I like the general melody after you get to about 33s in, however before that I'm not sure the note choice is great considering what its building up to. There's also a bit of an overdrive sound effect on some of the lower notes in this part and whether it's intentional or not I'd recommend bringing it out a little more.
• After you get back to the start of the melody at 33s after the break at 33s I'd recommend starting the build (the noise filter in the background) right then at the start of the melody as I feel it should start building right away to maintain that intensity the break provides.
• Whatever kind of cymbal you're using in the background is a little much; I'd recommend adding a filter to it to make it give it a little less attack (sharpness) and reduce the volume. It's good for the intro part but after you have the lead come in it definitely needs to come down a significant amount.
• The part at 1:40 is a little unusual and should be removed imo as it kinda takes away from the rest of what's built.
• Whatever that weird noise is that comes in around 1:50 (not even sure what it is) gets annoying real fast. Not sure if that's the point but it's a poor choice for variation.
• It would be nice to hear some kind of trance drone in the background as kind of a simple counter-melody to add some variation

[OffensiveLemon]

I got so scared, I wet my pants!

Really. What is wrong with you. That was so unnecessary.

Anyway, pretty interesting song. Has a lot of potential and is really fun to listen to. Just a few suggestions:

• I like the general melody after you get to about 33s in, however before that I'm not sure the note choice is great considering what its building up to. There's also a bit of an overdrive sound effect on some of the lower notes in this part and whether it's intentional or not I'd recommend bringing it out a little more.
• After you get back to the start of the melody at 33s after the break at 33s I'd recommend starting the build (the noise filter in the background) right then at the start of the melody as I feel it should start building right away to maintain that intensity the break provides.
• Whatever kind of cymbal you're using in the background is a little much; I'd recommend adding a filter to it to make it give it a little less attack (sharpness) and reduce the volume. It's good for the intro part but after you have the lead come in it definitely needs to come down a significant amount.
• The part at 1:40 is a little unusual and should be removed imo as it kinda takes away from the rest of what's built.
• Whatever that weird noise is that comes in around 1:50 (not even sure what it is) gets annoying real fast. Not sure if that's the point but it's a poor choice for variation.
• It would be nice to hear some kind of trance drone in the background as kind of a simple counter-melody to add some variation

This was my first song I actually bothered to finish, so of course it sounds pretty friggin' weird.

• "Overdrive?" I don't really know what that means. (I am a noob at some of this stuff.)
• That "weird noise" is supposed to be an alarm in the background. Yeah, perhaps I should turn it down.
• Okay, what exactly is a trance?

[PixelPest]

Overdrive is basically when an instrument is distorted to the point where it sounds kind of low, fuzzy, and growly. (If you've ever heard rock music, hard rock usually uses electric guitars like this instead of normal ones.) If the alarm has something to do with the level you might be fine but I'd strongly recommend dropping the volume down quite a bit. You can also always build it up louder later as the song goes on. Trance music is kind of droning synth music (if you do an Internet search you'll find some). Basically what I was suggesting was a light, droning synth line in the background to give it some more depth and variation. Tbh if this is the first time you've ever made something like this you've done really well

[arcade999]

The song is cool, but it's true that the rythme a bit scary, like, it would work well in an ghost hunting video.

La chanson est bonne, mais c'est vrais que le rythme est un peu épeurant, du genre, elle paraîtrerait bien dans une vidéo de chasseur de fantôme.